The message of the interactive website is to truly appreciate everything you have because it can be taken in an instant. The purpose is to show watchers the impact the storm really had, both physically and mentally on the community. The many devastating photos and lists of victims shows the damage the storm really caused, it took the lives of 51 people but the hearts of many more. The intended audience is anyone who is a victim of something, It shows that you can prepare all you want physically but mentally adjusting is the hardest challenge. Since the author decided to make this interactive, it draws the watcher in and keeps their attention throughout. The website gave a very grim and depressing tone but it was needed to truly convey the message, The website is better at drawing in the audience than the book because of the pictures and interactions.
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The podcast I chose to listen to is called "Gals On the Go". This podcast features on of my favorite youtubers, Danielle Carolan. In the episode they discuss pop culture and their favorite quotes. The intended audience for this podcast is most likely teenage girls and early twenties. The intended message of the podcast is to be a relatable way to create entertainment. The speakers both create a relaxed setting to help the listener feel like they are apart of the conversation. The podcast was interesting to listen to because there are two opinions and two people giving advice. The speakers could have used more ethos and pathos throughout the podcast to improve the listening experience.
I decided on the message of my narrative based on the events that took place and the use of ethos throughout to build an emotional connection. The message I chose is to be grateful for who is in your life because they can be taken away in an instance. The planning I did for my narrative was to first build a topic and then decide on a message and then fill in the gaps. I started by dividing my outline into three sections with the intro, body and conclusion. Along the way I added more sensory details, redid the framework to make the first paragraph the present, the middle the past and the conclusion the present again. In the final draft I was tasked with adding more dialogue and include more of an analysis for my sensory details. To begin these revisions, I had to look back at the event and decide which details to incorporate. The in-class comments helped me to revise my essay by adding more details and solidify my message. My peers encouraged me to add more of the rhetorical devices and supporting details. Reviewing someone else’s work made me see that I need to not only tell the story but describe it with enough detail to engage the reader. The class activity of reviewing “The Storm in Fragments” helped me to develop my personal narrative. The feedback from the conference helped me to properly turn in my narrative and rethink my format and when to use present and past tense. The parts of the process that were helpful include the two rough drafts and opportunity to revise the essay twice. A new technique I will incorporate into any future narratives is the format of present, past and then present again. When first starting this assignment I would give myself the advice to make sure my essay is properly turned in and to check in with the teacher if I’m having issues. It was a normal Sunday morning when during breakfast my dad began experiencing severe pain. That day he had a cardiac arrest. The sight of people scrambling. The sound of sirens. The touch of his cold skin. The taste of the chicken noodle soup eaten in the hospital cafeteria. The smell of latex and hand sanitizer.The authors message is to appreciate what you because it can be changed in an instant. The purpose is to show readers a first hand experience of a tornado and how devastating it can be to a community. The intended audience is adult readers, possibly anthropologists, as this excerpt is apart of a book called "The anthology of Tuscaloosa Writers". From reading we know that the author has lived in Tuscaloosa for 27 years but has always felt like an outsider, even his neighbors don't call him a southerner. The author purposely splits up the two different tornados into two different recollections and explains the effects of each one. The author uses the appeal of pathos throughout causing the reader to feel sadness when the mother died and when the community was torn apart literally and figuratively.
Caroline Welle, Elise Mitchell, Alexis Castellar 1.Dad loses son and goes on an adventure
2.Business trip goes wrong #wheresmysupersuit 3. One girl had seven roomates I am reviewing Elise Mitchell's e-portfolio. The two tabs are easy to locate, however the rhetorical analysis tab is missing. To navigate these pages the viewer goes to the top left corner and chooses one then scrolls through. The website has a neutral tone and the font and font size is very easy to read. The designer has one home page photo of a boat which enhances the visual appeal. It is easy to move between pages and access elements within a tab. The page could include more color to draw viewers in. The page is appropriate for academic and professional uses.
To begin the essay I first had to evaluate the text and decide what rhetorical devices were most prevalent. After doing so i then composed a thesis statement to begin the rough draft of the essay and lay out my thought process. As I completed my second draft I used the advice from my conference to help me further develop my essay. I then revised any spelling and grammatical errors. When i started my final draft I kept in mind my my peer revisions and advice to edit my essay. I added more towards my conclusion and split up the body paragraph. For my final draft I also added more examples of rhetorical devices and revised my conclusion paragraph. I also corrected any grammatical errors. Lastly I expanded on my analysis and used the advice from my conference to make another body paragraph. The feedback from the conference helped me because it was a one on one conversation and I could clearly see any mistakes I had previously made. The peer revision is very helpful for me because it gives a different perspective and lets me know what I should revise. Reviewing another peer's paper was also helpful because I could see what they needed to revise and realized that I may need to revise the same thing. The class activities helped me to use the rhetorical devices properly in my essay to support my analysis. This paper was unique from most I had written in the past because there were two rough drafts instead of one. This was helpful because I could look over my work twice and revise it very throughly before turning in the final draft. My writing process could improve by using more time management. Advice I would give myself when first starting this project would be to not procrastinate and utilize all resources. Also to learn how to use the library printer.
Should I split up the second paragraph?
Do I need to make the summary shorter? How can I make my thesis more in depth? Based on the video I can tell that the speaker is a male in his twenties. I can also tell that the speaker is the author of a book and the video is an excerpt from that book. The speaker's tone starts out gloomy as he is constantly traveling with little pay. Eventually the mood switches to be a bit more upbeat as he realizes it's not the monetary pay that matters its the places he goes, the people he meets and things he experiences. The speaker created the video for his potential book customers, most likely teenagers and early twenties. The overall message from the video is to appreciate the little things in life. I did connect with this message, it is very important to value everything around you, even if it's just the sun shining or laughter. The purpose of the narrative is to show that even though we are from many different places we all have similarities. The most humorous part of the video was when he was traveling around place to place and highlighting the little details he remembered. The sad aspect was the daily routine and how it seemed like he was still on the corporate hamster wheel.
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AuthorCaroline Welle. |